I really love that story. ^^ I think you managed to get the essence of all the characters as they were at the time. Inerestingly enough, I think Satoshi and Haruko *weren't* quite as good friends at that point game as they seemed to be in the story (although I think by then he'd managed to stop being afraid of her), so you foreshadowed that happening. He is still wise not to trust her with his keys, though.

And oh, how I miss Satoshi and Katie's old relationship. But there's his problem: when he's not sure what to do, he won't do anything. While things couldn't have been the same for them after her kidnapping, they could at least have been better. Same goes for him and Taki later on, although there was less to build on in that one. (Sorry, RDM, but it's true. For a while, Satoshi and Katie could talk about almost anything, and he never had that level of comfort with Taki.)

Ironically enough, towards the end of my time playing, I think Satoshi was the most comfortable around Haruko. They got along well, and he didn't really worry too much about how she perceived him.